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Post by Ink on Mar 29, 2009 18:43:12 GMT -7
Will You Listen While You Can Still Hear?I have my own problems
But I can’t feel that they’re justified
When things are going okay for me
Only, that’s just what I think, what I say
Nobody taught me how to look
How to see me for who I am
And now I’ve been so unsure
I can’t tell if I’m happy or sad
But the fact that I’m crying
I guess indicates it pretty well
Still, I feel so damn guilty
I shouldn’t be like this
I shouldn’t make people worry
I guess they are more messed up than me
I’m not allowed to feel bad
Because they have it worse
Or so I’ve told myself too many times
But I think I have a right
I can cry when I’m sad
I can be sad when things don’t work out
But that feels too much like giving up
It feels too much like I’m steeling
What’s up with you friend?
Won’t you tell me when I ask?
I feel guilty when I hear you
Your life is worse than mine
But is it really? How can we tell?
Why is it that I want mine to be worse?
Let me tell you, it’s not being selfless
God I feel so selfish
I can’t tell anybody this
But I will to defy my emotions
It leaves me fucking terrified
This is too private
But I can’t keep it to myself
And I know I shouldn’t complain
My life is going okay
I say that over and over
But somehow it doesn’t help
It doesn’t make me feel any better
I guess that means something’s wrong
But I’m still lost and confused
I still don’t know what’s up
Only that I’m going down
But I’m still here for them
So reach out and grab me
No matter what goes down
I won’t let it be you
Because you’d do the same for me
At least, I hope you would
But I can’t tell how much you trust me
And how much I miss
Or how much you hide
I want you to be open with me
But then again I have my secrets
So ask me for help
No matter who you are
I can’t give you advice
But I can be there
And I will be there
I need you all to know
That I care more about you
Than I do about me
Or maybe that’s a lie
I can’t tell.
I can’t tell.
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Hee hee hee, watch it go! ^ and one more thing, WTF?!!!
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Post by Echo on Mar 29, 2009 19:05:34 GMT -7
wow ink
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Post by Ink on Mar 29, 2009 19:06:06 GMT -7
Is that a good wow?
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Post by Echo on Mar 29, 2009 19:08:37 GMT -7
yes, its a wow thats deep wow
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Post by Ink on Mar 29, 2009 19:10:16 GMT -7
Thanks.
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Post by + RJ on Mar 29, 2009 19:10:57 GMT -7
Well, I have to say only... wow. It's a sort of, just, shocked wow. Like, amazed that it's so wonderful, kind of troubled by it, and just, rather stunned.
It's kind of like when someone slaps you across the face or dumps cold water all over you.
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Post by Echo on Mar 29, 2009 19:13:42 GMT -7
ahh...but it was a soft slap, and berry flavored water, it has somthing in it for everyone...
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Post by Ink on Mar 29, 2009 19:14:43 GMT -7
Haha. I just wrote whatever came to mind.
I'm glad it's good, but at the same time sad because it's true...
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Post by + RJ on Mar 29, 2009 19:15:02 GMT -7
Actually it's a very very hard slap. Backhand slap.
And more like acid than water
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Post by Ink on Mar 30, 2009 17:56:07 GMT -7
I prefer everyone read their own meaning out of it I guess. xD
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Post by Randy on Apr 1, 2009 10:27:49 GMT -7
I can't count how many times I've felt that exact same thought.
I found your poem is really deep and it's so much like what I've felt so many times. I think you did a better job of expressing it than I ever did. You did a really good job with the poem. Thanks for sharing it.
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Post by Ink on Apr 1, 2009 18:41:40 GMT -7
Thanks. I think I can write more expressive stuff or whatever because I don't like to bother with rhyme schemes or something. Although free verse can sometimes turn out poorly it usually works for me. *shrugs*
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Post by + RJ on Apr 1, 2009 19:16:09 GMT -7
Rhyme always makes it hard for me to really say anything...
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Post by Randy on Apr 3, 2009 9:10:27 GMT -7
I always like the flow they give... It makes it easier for me to actually write it. *shrug*
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They dont all fit...
