Painful

[Echo]

Pain,
fails to surprise me
i meet my demise in a sea
not a sea of love,
a sea of blood
a sea of pain
I strain, to look away
but my head will not twist
and my heart will not cease to trip,
i slip,
i breathe
I die
but nothing stops this shit
i thought nothing could sink our ship
now everythings gone wrong
and my heart no longer sings our song.
it instead sings alone
sings monotone,
it needs your love
but we only get a coo of a dove
so much for us
now its only dust
what we were,
is gone
and now,
only pain fills that void
but it was your choice
that made you leave us
now my song sings alone
bitter,
lonly,
painful

-Echo

my boyfriend broke up with me...=[

[+ RJ]

Overall I like the message

[Randy]

Nice poem, you could fix the grammer, though. It certainly gets your message out, and it flows good. Like RJ said, overall it's a nice message and a nice poem.

[Echo]

xD, ya, not the best grammer....