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Post by + RJ on Mar 22, 2009 17:57:55 GMT -7
Take a trip on the power trip Everybody wants it Nobody takes fair play here Without it, we are useless Meaningless shells of humans Disgusted with the world With myself and with the nature Of reality Or the human reality which Shows us who we really are Greedy creatures that can only want More posessions and more power Want to bring pain To as many others as possible Even though we're all the same None of us are civilized Some days I think I can Make a difference Evolve to a new state of mind I want to be better than the rest Better than I am now I wanted to be somebody Until I realized I don't care anymore Because wanting to be somebody Makes you just like everyone else All the other people with the same cliche dream But being so perfect makes me Disgusted with the world With myself and with those Who hold their expectations high I'd rather go to Hell And do it thoroughly To want what I want and not care If someone else has an opinion It's not their life I want to go on a power trip And you know what? Sometimes I want to bring pain To all the people Who don't respect their human side The ones who think they're better. The only way to be somebody Is to try to be nobody.
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Echo
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Hee hee hee, watch it go! ^ and one more thing, WTF?!!!
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Post by Echo on Mar 22, 2009 18:25:24 GMT -7
its a tad long.
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Post by + RJ on Mar 23, 2009 16:12:28 GMT -7
Poems aren't really supposed to be short.
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Post by Ink on Mar 23, 2009 16:15:25 GMT -7
I think it's good Jj, and I like the length, I think it allows you to ahve more freedom and put in more detailed emotion. ^^
*eye twitches*
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Post by + RJ on Mar 23, 2009 20:52:29 GMT -7
*eye twitches?* XD ...I think I know what you mean
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Randy
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Call me Randy if you don't want to type "SuperMan" ^^
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Post by Randy on Mar 24, 2009 10:59:50 GMT -7
Poems can be as long or as short as the author wants, there's no limit... But somewhere around 14 pages I tend to call it quits, lol.
Anyways, I find it's a very nice poem, though one thing did get to me. You could describe more of the Power Trip and put that more into the poem. But other than that, I think it's a very emotional, nicely written, deep poem. Good work.
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