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Post by + RJ on Mar 19, 2009 19:31:59 GMT -7
Sitting with her headphones The volume turned on high Enough to hear the heavy beat But she don't care don't ask why
Watching from the corner While the world goes on its way She's quiet for the moment, yes But she's got a lot to say
Waiting for something to happen Been through a lot by now She's already made it this far She don't know so don't ask how
Praying for the moment When she can kiss this town goodbye Holding on to that one thought Allows her not to cry
Thinking about the past Never helped to get her through She tries to put it all behind She don't miss them, don't ask who
Forgetting about what time it is And what she has to do She has no time to prioritize No time to think things through
Worrying about something dumb She wants to make the cut As for what's been bothering her She don't even know so don't ask what
Looking at broken picture frames Glass shattered on the floor She broke them quite a while back When her happiness went out the door
Flashing back into her past Where does it begin? There was a time when she could smile She don't remember, so don't ask when
Standing up it's time to go Can't stay in one place for long Tired of the same old lyrics She hits the button to change the song
Hurting for a memory Selfish but she doesn't care Some place a long long time ago She don't know so don't ask where
Listen to her story She's got a lot to tell The girl I'm talking about is me Surprise surprise so listen well
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Post by Ink on Mar 19, 2009 19:59:10 GMT -7
You say it's you, but it sounds too much like me.
Anyways, that's really good. I like the improper grammar even though that normall bugs me to death. ^^
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Post by + RJ on Mar 19, 2009 20:01:08 GMT -7
Oh I shoulda said.... not really me, just said it for the poem
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Post by Ink on Mar 19, 2009 20:05:02 GMT -7
Oh, well who is it then? Just random fiction? xD Of course it doens't sound like me too, in that I don't particularly desire to get out of town, and I don't have broken picture frames and things... But much of it is similar too. ^^
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Post by + RJ on Mar 20, 2009 17:29:51 GMT -7
It's not random fiction. Rather, a sort of compilation of many people I know.
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Post by Ink on Mar 20, 2009 17:40:17 GMT -7
Ah, okay ^^
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Post by Randy on Mar 24, 2009 10:47:47 GMT -7
Wow, that's actually one of my favorite poems by you. It flows really well, I like the ending of the verses when you say she doesn't remember/know so don't ask. It's really well constructed, and actually would fit a lot of people(especially teenagers). So, good job. ^^
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Post by + RJ on Mar 25, 2009 17:42:29 GMT -7
Oh thanks! I'm fond of this one too
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Post by farha on Jun 23, 2009 8:05:34 GMT -7
great poem, really powerful
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